For the review!

Now the intro strings are too loud which drowns out other sounds so I would start to look at mastering the string (may be turn it down a touch). The same goes for the .... monster synth? (Not sure what to describe it as). The melody is too repetitive and difficult to listen to.

Despite your comment about drums I can feel the kick on the bass which is a sign of good EQ(ing).

Going back to the main synth, it really does not fit well in this track as it is too harsh and thus results in distorting all the other sounds in the background. Also, Im sure this is a preset from one of the FL synths (HL harmor or harmless comes to mind). I would steer clear away from the presets for one reason:

The easiest way to differentiate between a good music producer and a person in their bedroom is by the samples used. For example, the best house and dance have high quality samples (drums), while never EVER using a preset (you will find that the best DJs make their own samples). A classic example is DJ Sasha - Xpanda.

This song on the whole was very difficult to listen to and needs severe improvement. Start by looking into that main synth! Personally if I had ownership of this project I would first get out the FMDRIVE synth (mega drive vst), up the beat and turn it into a graveyard game level.

So lets start from the top:

WRONG BASS DRUM. Make it harder, louder but not overpowered. That way you can emphasise the guitar. Because of that I feel that the song really was wack.

Your guitar is OK at times and not to well at others. For example, the intro was excellent (really had a smile on me). But then the weak drums come in and there was not backing to the main melody so it was very bland. Then you have your headbang section at 52 seconds but it was really lacking.

Check out a song called agalloch - limbs. You may find it good inspiration. This is because your section at 1:08 had a similar sound.

There is much I would change but otherwise you are really not that far off!
For now, work on your drums and think about how to complement your main guitar properly with harmonies.

Constant arpegio on the harp ruined the intro. Try using more of a strum from low to high quickly and only on the beat every so often to make a more dramatic sound.

Choir, well done.
Sleigh bells. Again, nice!
Flute, I would have used a different instrument. Piccolo I think would have done better.
The church bells where very nice

As the song progressed you really outdid yourself which is why I feel that you need to change the harps.

All in all, it was a lovely song